2 Jan 2009 [Highlighted: Dismay Disco Chapter 6, indicating that these are the notes for chapter 6, not the draft itself.]
In old black and white classics there is often a [scribble] main character who thinks he’s charming, handsome and sophisticated. Some [scribbled out: “modest”; “office worker or rich art dilettante with” (scribble) — these don’t make sense because they’re misc. notes] suited professional with cuff links and a full-service bar in the corner of his living room. A dilettante in both art and literature, his library is filled wall-to-wall [left margin, scribbled out: “and floor to ceiling”] with books he’s skimmed and marked. Famous paintings hang single file in his hallway: they’re originals he bought at auction. He always [insert: “carries” above, scribbled out “has” (scribble)] a glass of [insert: “champagne” above, scribble (possibly “brandy”) below] in one hand and a cigarette in the other. He speaks slowly and with feigned thoughtfulness to ensure that what he’s saying sounds profound, [scribbled out “and”] elegant, and most importantly, sexy. For all of this haughtiness, for all of these chocolates decorated with flecks of gold and served on silk, for every bottle of Merlot, you would be surprised that [insert: “all” scribbled out] his wealth and all this brouhaha are merely a byproducts [the “a” is a mistake; the line formerly read “a byproduct”] of his father’s nepotism and not the reward [another mistake] for years abroad studying his craft or any other genuine source of pride.